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Springbokkx Mon 17 Jul 2023 03:41:17 No.7458
My new story is in second-person. "You" aren't being fed, nor are you exactly doing the feeding either. You're really just witnessing it. I have an idea for a sequel where that might change, though...

Also, writing in the second-person actually really hard. Or at least it seems like it's hard to do it well. I'm not sure if I did it well this time. I feel like half the sentences starting with "you" gets pretty old, but I was having a hard time wording things any other way.

As always, I appreciate any feedback that anyone has.

https://www.deviantart.com/springbokkx/art/Your-New-Roommate-SSBBW-WG-972327701
Anonymous Wed 19 Jul 2023 04:22:44 No.7478
>>7458
This story is pretty good. When you say you have some ideas for a darker follow-up story, what were you thinking about? I was personally imagining a story where she falls down, injures her leg, and is unable to get off the floor.
Anonymous Wed 19 Jul 2023 04:24:08 No.7479 
>>7478 Then she couldbe faced with a conundrum. Either at her own leg or starve to death.
Springbokkx Thu 20 Jul 2023 02:28:51 No.7483
>>7478
I'm not sure exactly how far I want to take it. There will definitely be a focus on Madeleine's mobility struggles. But I don't know if I want to leave it at that or go even further with health issues.
Springbokkx Thu 20 Jul 2023 02:29:38 No.7484
>>7478
Oh yeah, and thanks for reading by the way! I'm glad you liked the story.
FC Punk Sat 22 Jul 2023 16:42:06 No.7502
https://www.deviantart.com/fc-punk/art/Sheena-484930901
I used second person POV in Sheena, yjen I continued it with its sequel Rebecca (TW, https://www.deviantart.com/fc-punk/art/Rebecca-https://www.deviantart.com/fc-punk/art/Rebecca-Part-2-734986312
-1-734984781/scat)https://www.deviantart.com/fc-punk/art/Rebecca-Part-3-734988201https://www.deviantart.com/fc-punk/art/Rebecca-Final-734988729
There's also an on going spin off called Samantha is also Second Person, to carry on the theme.
Anonymous Sat 10 May 2025 14:09:00 No.10956 
>>10955
Revuelto is decent????? fuck wrong with you.
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